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课件网) 高考英语读后续写语篇练习户外探险———登山遭遇恶劣天气题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向Part 1题目呈现续写原文Surviving Mount RainierBad luck and poor timing left Kart and three climbers stuck on Mount Rainier for several long days. They faced mountain climbing’s toughest tests. One man suffered altitude sickness; ice and rockfall rained down at night; cold nights in a tent that got torn left them hypothermic(体温过低的). Calm confidence, skill and the courage to continue up the route, despite illness and injury, likely saved their lives.The climbers set out on a Friday, camping low on the route the first night because they were concerned about rockfall after a climber had recently died in an accident at the route’s typical high camp. On Saturday, at about 10,500 feet, one of the climbers became sick from the altitude, which began to slow them down. They needed to keep moving, so they put him in the lead so he could move at a pace he was comfortable with.续写原文By Sunday evening, the ill climber was exhausted, and they had to make an unplanned camp on steep snow. They were in a bad place—on a platform about the size of a table under an ice cliff. The wind got stronger during the night, ripping the tent and snapping the poles. They tried to secure it by placing their packs and rocks around the edges. Finally, they just stuck their feet between the rocks and held the tent with their bodies. It was a cold night.段首句Para 1：On Monday, they managed to call 911 but forgot to ask how to communicate with the rangers (护林员) before losing signal. Para 2：On Wednesday, they gathered everything and decided to carry on with their climb.Part 2题目分析续写原文分析本篇书面表达是读后续写，文章讲述了Kart和三位被困雷尼尔山登山者的遭遇。故事按照时间顺序展开。他们在周五出发，周六，一位队员的高原反应减缓他们的速度，让他们在周日不得不更换临时扎营地点———在冰崖下一个桌子那么大的平台上。糟糕的帐篷的选址以及恶劣的天气使他们帐篷严重受损，让他们度过寒冷的一晚上。周一他们联系上911，但是恶劣天气让救援无法到达，食物要耗尽，此时也无法下山。因此，周三他们聚集所有物品决定继续向上攀登上山，历经艰辛与危险，终于爬到山顶，天气放晴，他们得救了。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点续写思路分析Para 1：On Monday, they managed to call 911 but forgot to ask how to communicate with the rangers (护林员) before losing signal.由第一段首句内容“周一，他们设法拨打了911，但在失去信号之前忘记询问如何与护林员沟通。”可知，第一段可描写他们只能在原地等待救援，但是恶劣的天气让救援人员和直升飞机过不来，食品也要耗尽，冰崩让他们本来就很小的地方无法立足，也无法下山。续写思路分析Para 2：On Wednesday, they gathered everything and decided to carry on with their climb.由第二段首句内 ... ...
