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课件网) 高考英语读后续写语篇练习被迫去山里远足，最终收获颇丰题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向Part 1题目呈现续写原文Edun did not want to go on a hike. She especially did not want to go on a long hike in the mountains that led to a tiny cabin (小木屋) with no electricity and no running water. She wanted to stay home reading a book instead while wrapped in a warm blanket.“Ready ”Mom asked cheerfully after breakfast. Edun looked out the window and only saw rain, lots of it. “We should go another day,” Edun suggested. “Maybe a hundred years from now.” She worried she would get tired on the hike. She worried about getting bored at the dark cabin. Mom said it was time to stop worrying and get into the car.Edun’s brother, Will, was waiting in the garage, who wore a camera around his neck. Will was four years older than Edun and had climbed many more mountains. He’d started hiking when he was two and loved it.Because it was raining, Edun had to wear her rain pants, her rain hat, her rain jacket, and her waterproof boots. Her jacket had a rough material on the inside. She didn’t like how it felt against her skin.续写原文After about half an hour’s drive, they parked at a trailhead (登山口). The rain had stopped but the ground was still dripping wet. “We’ll be there by afternoon!” Mom promised. The afternoon sounded far away.Will identified a bird sitting on a nearby branch———Fox sparrow!”—then he raceddown the trail and was soon out of sight.Edunrested under a pine tree. “You can’t force me to walk,” Edun said. “You’re right,” said her mom smilingly, standing under the tree, too, “But you will never know what may lie ahead and amaze us.”段首句Para 1：Thinking Mom was right, Edun followed her down the trail.Para 2：Twenty minutes later, they saw the cabin.Part 2题目分析续写原文分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了艾顿不想去山里远足，但还是和家人一起出发了，由于下雨而不得不穿上的雨衣使得艾顿感觉不舒适。半小时后，他们到达了登山口，威尔沿着小路去追小鸟，艾顿想要停下休息，妈妈告诉艾顿，如果不继续走，就永远不会知道前方有什么能使他们惊讶。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点续写思路分析Para 1：Thinking Mom was right, Edun followed her down the trail.由第一段首句内容“艾顿认为妈妈是对的，就跟着她走了。”可知，第一段可描写艾顿继续前行，看到了美丽的风景，不知不觉间，已经完成了大部分攀登。续写思路分析Para 2：Twenty minutes later, they saw the cabin.由第二段首句内容“二十分钟后，他们看到了小屋。”可知，第二段可描写他们来到小屋，晚上看星星，艾顿感谢妈妈邀请自己来。续写思路分析续写线索继续前行———美丽的风景———完成大部分攀登———到达小屋———看星星———感激续写素材可用词汇：行为类①寻找：look for/search for/seek②继续前行：go on/move on/keep on moving③拥抱：hug/embrace/hold in one’s arms情绪类①舒 ... ...
