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课件网) 发挥想象力，拆解动作 构造动作链、动作面 2025届读后续写 之动作描写 START 读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。一切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。想把我们的人物塑造得更饱满，就必须要有支撑他/她的各类描写，如语言描写、心理描写、动作描写等。但是我们在描写动作的时候往往会犯一个毛病，那就是太过于单薄。那么该如何将动作构建得饱满 要想把动作写得生动有画面感，其中的一个思路: 构造“_____”。 前言 动作链 在描写动作时，把动作过程拆解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作动作链，写出动作的连贯性。 方法一： A、B and C 结构 (强调动作的先后顺序） 方法二：合理扩展使用非谓语 构造动作链的方法 skill 1-动作链 START 01 描述一：他坐车去警局。 He went to the police station by car. 或He took a taxi to the police station. 简单描述 1 如何延长这句话： 拆解动作，构造动作链 他坐车去警局 1.他拦下车 3.告诉司机 2.带着行李跳上车 我要去警局 He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.” 前后对比： 俺们 8个词：He went to the police station by car. 状元们 19个词： He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.” 用法总结 方法一：使用2-3个并列的_____ stop 01 Jump in 02 told 03 动词 称之为：A、B and C 结构 (强调动作的先后顺序） START 02 描述二：男孩们跳入湖中玩耍 俺们：Boys jumped into the water for fun. 或者 Boys jumped into the lake to play. 2 如何延长这句话： 拆解动作，构造动作链 男孩们跳入湖中玩耍 1.男孩们冲向湖泊 3.跳进水里 2.脱下他们的衣服 用副词增加色彩 Boys rushed to the lake excitedly, took off their clothes and jumped into the water. 前后对比： 俺们7个词： Boys jumped into the lake to play. 状元们15个词： Boys rushed to the lake excitedly, took off their clothes and jumped into the water. START 03 描述三、她抱住她的孩子 She hugged her kids. 3 如何延长这句话： 拆解动作，构造动作链 她抱住她的孩子 1.她冲向前 3.把儿子揽进怀里 2.跪了下来 用副词增加色彩 She dashed forward in a hurry, knelt down and held her son into her arms. 前后对比： 俺们4个词： She hugged her kids. 状元们16个词： She dashed forward in a hurry, knelt down and held her son into her arms tightly. START 04 描述四、这个歌手唱歌 The singer is singing. 1 想出三个动作 ，使用A、B and C 结构 01 02 03 他看着观众 深吸了一口气 开始唱歌 The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing. 多加练习 边学边练 1.大卫低下头，扭动（wriggle）着双手。 2.老师满脸自豪地像我表示祝贺，并给了我一个温暖的拥抱。 3.我走近我爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。 4.双胞胎准备好早餐托盘，加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片，走出厨房。 5.老师走上前，拍了拍我的肩膀，温柔地说：“有志者，事竟成” 多加练习 边学边练 1.大卫低下头，扭动（wriggle）着双手。 2.老师满脸自豪地像我表示祝贺，并给了我一个温暖的拥抱。 3.我走近我爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。 David lowered his head and wriggled his hands. Overwhelming with pride,the teacher congratulated me and gave me a warm hug I approached Dad,proudly took out of own money and handed it to him. 多 ... ...
