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课件网) 众 “说” 纷 纭 读后续写之各种不同的“说”描写 Dialogue 对话 (dialogue) 是故事角色在整个故事中对彼此或对自己说的话。它可以用来揭示人物的性格和个性，它也可以用来推动情节向前发展，并展示情节发展的过程。我们需要用各种细节将主题编织进故事之中，让其不时地闪现，以展示故事的全部内涵。对话无疑是一种可以让全部内容显现出来的元素。人物在交谈、细语、呼喊、低吼、抱怨、讥讽、哀叹，而读者在倾听。相较于用枯燥的、阐释性的长篇大论去传达主题，对话这种方式不仅更快捷有效，而且更能激起读者的情感。 对话描写三原则 ● 真情实感 在对人物进行对话描写时, 真情实感是贴切人物的最好表达, 尽量避免过于“高大上”或“假大空”, 脱离人物的真实身份。 ● 描写比重恰到好处 在对人物冲突中的具体的对话描写, 要注意在文中段落中的比重问题, 切忌以全对话或大部分对话代替其他细节描写, 要恰到好处。 ● 推动情节发展 对话描写不推动情节发展、不反映人物特色、不刻画情感内涵，就是耍流氓……^_^ Part 1 你真的了解对话描写的构成吗？ “I hate them” , said Samuel angrily. “I hate them” , Samuel said in an angry voice. “I hate them” , screamed Samuel, clenching his fists. “I hate them” , screamed Samuel, his lips trembling and face twisted. “I hate them” , screamed Samuel, who looked as if he had broken down. Speech 话语 Dialogue tag 对话标签 Description 描述 Part 2 你能发现下列对话描写中的问题吗？ 1）“Hey, how are you ”, said Tom. “I‘m fine, how are you ” answered Jack. 2）“That is fantastic news,” he said happily in a loud voice. 3）“That's funny,” Lily giggled. 4） “I told you already,” I said, glaring. 1）“Hey, how are you ”, said Tom. “I‘m fine, how are you ” answered Jack. 2）“That is fantastic news,” he said happily in a loud voice. ● 废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物没有帮助。 ● 追求花哨，过度使用对话标签。此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调 会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。 改：“That is fantastic news！” he said / screamed / exclaimed. 3）“That's funny,” Lily giggled. 4） “I told you already,” I said, glaring. ● 用词不当，逻辑混乱 改：“That's funny,” Lily said, giggling. ● 对话标签多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签。此句对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用 dialogue tag“I said”来说明说话对象。 改：I glared at him,“I told you already.” 问与答 1. She greeted James and _____ (询问), “Are you ready for our field trip ” James didn’t _____ (回应). 提议、警告 2. “Maybe we should have a peace talk with China. Anyhow, China is not what it used to be”, an military officer _____ (提议) 3. A general _____ (警告)，“We cannot go to war with China! They have the best hypersonic missles in the world!” Part 3 众“说”纷纭 asked / inquired reply / respond advised / proposed cautioned / warned 小声说 4. She tiptoed into the room and _____ (悄悄说) to me, “I looked at every plant and I know I got the best one!” 5. "How lovely this puppy is," she _____ (低声说). 6. "She must be really mad at me," ... ...
