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课件网) Welcome to our class Janet Lead in Enjoy a beautiful song. 一壶漂泊 浪迹天涯难入喉 流浪太苦了 你走之后 酒暖回忆思念瘦 好想你，我瘦了 水向东流 时间怎么偷 时间过的太快了 花开就一次成熟 我却错过 我错过了唯一的机会 Which one is better How to make your description vivid Show，don't tell Version 1: She felt cold. Version 2: She pulled her collar up, tightened her scarf, and turned her face away from the biting wind. Tell是直接陈述结论，而Show则把读者拉到你描述的场景当中，通过故事细节的展示，让读者自己得出结论。 Read and Compare Tell Show What is Show， Dont' tell Show means give the readers actions, thoughts, senses, and feelings rather than simple descriptions. How？ She walked to the window. She slipped out of bed and tiptoed to the window. 她溜下床，蹑手蹑脚地走到窗户旁边。 Skill 1：Choose specific Verbs用精准动词代替笼统动词 How to show (1) All of the words below can take the place of said, but they are used under different conditions. Choose the proper words to fill in the blanks. The Math Test As the test began, Mike leaned over to _____, "I'm stuck.” "Focus," Tom muttered back. Minutes later, Mike had to_____, "Tell me the answer” "No," Tom_____ firmly. "Please," Mike began to _____, "I'll fail if you don’t tell me." Tom started to _____, "it's wrong!” Suddenly, the teacher stood over them, asking "Is there a problem ” Mike tried to _____, "I was just... asking for a pencil." ask beg explain reply whisper complain whisper ask replied beg complain explain 低语 询问 回答 乞求 抱怨 解释 想要增添“读后续写”的表达效果，特别要注意避免使用泛泛而谈的抽象词，应该多使用具体词汇。 Tell ： He is eating Latiao. Show： He tore the package, squeezed out one strip, and took a big bite. How to show (2) Skill 2: Break down action to form action chain He was disappointed to see the test paper. 看到试卷 He _____ quickly, _____ the score, and _____ the table in disappointment. 如何分解动作： 扫视试卷 看到成绩 捶打课桌 scanned the test paper spotted pounded Mom spanked me. 指出错误 妈妈打我 严肃的看着我 轻轻的打了我 Mom _____ me seriously, _____ my mistake, and _____ me gently as a lesson. stared at pointed out spanked 画面：下车 动作拆解： 收拾行李，起身，下车 He his luggage, from the chair and then _____ the car excitedly. picked up rose got off Scene: 跳水救人 Henry jumped into the river and saved Robert. When the “Help!”, Henry the riverside, _____his clothes and the water without hesitation. He Robert just as he was sinking the last time. By great effort, and with much danger to himself, he finally _____ Robert to the shore. hearing dashed to took off jumped into reached pulled / dragged Watch a video clip 文本分析 I tried to shake her off, but she just clamped on tight and yanked me along, saying, "Come on!" My mom came out of the house and immediately got the world’s complex look on her face. "Well, hello," she says to Juli. "Hi!" I'm still trying to pull free, but the girl's got me in a ... ...
