高考英语作文高分策略：名校真实学生考试中高分作文整理（八）

中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台 高考英语作文高分策略： 名校真实学生考试中高分作文整理（八） 作文题目： 假定你是李华，你刚参加完本市组织的一场国际马拉松比赛，赛后应邀给组委会写一封邮件反馈自己比赛的感受并提出一些个人建议。 内容包括： 1. 此次比赛办得好的方面； 1. 此次比赛待改进的方面以及你的相应建议。 好句： [Racing track + City transportation] 1. With many historical sites and modern buildings included, the racing track is a reasonable one, along which not only can I enjoy the fascinating and breath-taking city scenery, but also get more knowledge about the development and prosperity of our city. 2. So thoughtful and caring was the committee that they arranged a reasonable racing track, along which red flags and signs were set every 500 meters, enabling competitors to know how long they had run and got encouraged. 3. It was the reasonable racing track with charming city scenery that made the marathon particularly impressive. 4. Had it not been for the reasonable racing track, I wouldn’t have had the chance to explore my city and see so much wonderful scenery, which was ignored and unnoticed in my busy daily life. 5. However, some participants were not satisfied with the racing tracking, explaining that the inconvenience it caused was out of proportion to the benefits it brought because they had to make turns frequently. 6. The reasonable racing track allows participants to enjoy the beautiful scenery while skipping busy main roads so as to avoid messing up the city transportation. [Audience] 1. Difficult as running a marathon is, I finally managed to achieve the goal I set with the encouragement of the enthusiastic audience. 2. Nothing was comparable to the cheers of the enthusiastic audience, which filled me with confidence and encouraged me to run fearlessly. 3. The audience being too enthusiastic, with some breaking the rules and crossing the line, the situation became a bit in disorder. [Supply] 1. Given that the marathon is a long distance running, adequate supply such as salty water is a must, with which participants can get sufficient energy to move on. 2. This marathon will be better with adequate supply on account of a large number of participants and long competing hours, for which I suggest that you set up some fixed areas offering food and drinks. [Other aspects] 1. However, some disadvantages need to be addressed. 2. Nevertheless, there remain unsettled problems that shouldn’t be neglected……………… - 3. In addition, this marathon being an international race with lots of foreign participants, bilingual volunteers should be there to offer help. 4. Had it not been for it, I wouldn’t have met with people sharing the same interest from different walks of life. As a result, I believe everyone has benefited from their enlarged interpersonal circle. 好段： 1. Filled with excitement and joy, I’d like to convey my sincere congratulations on the accomplishment of the marathon, which is one of the most marvelous ones I’ve attended, owing to ... ...