(
课件网) Constant modification makes a good article 好文章是改出来的 高考评分标准： 第一档 覆盖了所有内容要点； 运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇； 语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现较强的语言运用能力； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、内容紧凑。完全达到了预期写作目的。 I. Assessment Criteria Content Language Structure A good composition Beautiful 假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的学生李华。你班同学张强即将去国外读书，下面四幅图描述了同学们为他送行的过程，请根据图片的先后顺序用英语写一篇日记。 注意：1. 日记的开头已为你写好。 2. 词数不少于60。 This afternoon, II.Task analysis--审文字 话题： 文体： 时态： 人称： 送行 叙事 (日记) 一般过去时 第一人称 第三人称 审图1 要点：上台讲话 细节：黑板上的“友谊地久天长”，同学流泪，气氛悲伤,表达不舍 1.Give a brief speech 2.Moved to tears 3. express his unwillingness to leave 4. Long Live Friendship 审图 2 要点 gave him a gift 细节： a heart-shaped board moments flashed into our mind 图3 signed names wrote encouraging words express wishes 要点： took a photo 细节 : record the precious moment smile with tears held the flowers 审图4 give a brief speech gave him a gift signed names took a photo moved to tears express his unwillingness to leave Long Live Friendship a heart-shaped board with pictures moments flashed into our mind record the precious moment smile with tears held the flowers express wishes wrote encouraging words Remember? III. Polishing --Language(shining point) 1）Long distance will not hinder our friendship. I really hope he can have a nice future abroad. --田意歆 2）Having received the gift, Zhang couldn’t help smiling. --孔维伟 3）Tears welled up in her eyes. No words can describe that touching moment. --周欣洋 4）We stuck the pictures on a board which bear the weight of our memory. --李星瑶 5）At first, Zhang Qiang gave an oration to express how unwilling to leave. --杨博涵 6) Next came the thrilling moment. --孙玥 7）Sadness filled my heart .Tears slipped down my face.--高林翾 8）We signed our names on his T-shirt to convey our best wishes . --朱一苇 9）To Zhang Qiang’s surprise, we created a heart-shaped board which decorated with cherished photos. --张显 10) He would head for a foreign country to continue his study. –吴宪晖 11） We took a photo together with Zhang Qiang holding the flowers.–吴宪晖 hinder Having received welled up which bear the weight of our memory to express howunwilling Next came slipped down to convey To Zhang Qiang’ssurprise head for with Zhang Qiang holding the flowers III. Language-- Practice We took photos together. . (定从） The photos can remind him of the happy moments. The photos that we took together can remind him of the happy moments. After we heard his touching speech, we sank into silence. (分词） Having heard his touching speech, we sank into silence. 3. The moment was recorded by the camera. The moment was carved into our hearts. (not only , but also) The moment was not on ... ...
