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课件网) 专题二 读后续写 第2讲 微观把握 突破读后续写 技法四 营造续写故事的高潮 ●技法点拨 故事中的高潮是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时候，它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点，发生了一些事情，或者主角必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果。 妙招1 增加外部冲突 增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。 (1)角色之间的冲突 On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy.After driving in vain for time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up a tent there？David and I became nervous. 【解析】 开车找旅馆→徒劳无功→母亲建议在他人的后院搭帐篷→David和“我”倍感紧张，心有不悦(母子的观点不一) (2)随时间的发展，决策变得紧急 The car abruptly stopped in front of him.“Get into the car！” Paul shouted at Mac.Mac jumped off the bike and slid into the car without delay as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into pieces.What a narrow escape! 【解析】 汽车突停面前→急喊上车→Mac 上车避险→饿狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容缓) (3) 使用环境描写增加不确定性 充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用。当故事角色在碰到困难的时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗、恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写可以增强高潮元素，使读者感受到紧张倍增。 Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest.(黑暗)Even worse, the temperature suddenly dropped dramatically.(寒冷)It didn't take long for the forest to be enveloped in darkness.(黑暗)Her rasping breath steamed in the moonlight and her throat was parched from thirst.(寒冷) (4) 由于增加的障碍，人物角色必须克服挑战，以达到他们的目标 But before we jumped off the horses, we found that we had been off the beaten track and got lost.We had no idea where we were and it got dark.Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. 【解析】 草原迷路(障碍1)———天色渐黑(障碍2)———又累又饿(障碍3)———心理恐慌(障碍4) 妙招2 放大内心冲突 放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。 But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Jane was so tired, hungry, and extremely frightened.She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarrelled with Tom.Where is Tom？He must have made the emergency call.What I need is enough courage.If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon.Suddenly, she heard the shouts of tigers, which made her scared to death.After she held her breath for a few minutes, everything was quiet again.In the terrible darkness, she slept again. 【解析】 夫妇争吵———妻子独自行走———荒野走散，夜色渐黑———独处森林———阴森恐怖———后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)———内心独白(往昔对比＋虚拟语气的使用＋旁白描写是常见技巧之一) ●真题体验 (2023·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷) When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not l ... ...
