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课件网) Continuation writing: An unexpected gift 阅读分析 your content is entered here, or by copying your text, select paste in this box and choose to retain only text. your content is typed here, or by copying your text, select paste in this box. 初步写作 Reading the material 第 01 章 Who 情节线（多找v.） 情感线（adj.） 角色1 角色2 角色3 角色4 What关键句（问题与矛盾） P1P2关键词 描写手法占比 语言/动作/心理/情绪/环境由高低顺序为： I still remember the day when we decorated the house. I was ten and it was two weeks before Christmas. I was looking forward to my presents. Since I'm the youngest in the family, all of the family members would give me a gift one way or another. Sometimes it was a cookie or a hug but it was always there. I was the only center of attention and it was feeling good. An unexpected Christmas gift My uncles usually would ask me what I wanted before Christmas and that year I knew what I wanted. It was the spaceship I saw in the ads. I was dreaming of opening a big gift box, and it was there. But that year it came in a way that I wasn't expecting. It was two weeks before Christmas. Just two weeks. She couldn't wait. My dear mother told my father that it was time, and then we went to the hospital. After an hour, they told me that I had a sister now. But I didn't want a sister. I wanted a spaceship. The next few days went so fast. No one was caring about me. Everyone was talking about her and I knew that my life is never going to be the same ever again. I wasn't ready to grow up, to be a big brother. But it just happened in an instant. On the day before Christmas, everyone was in our home, talking only about my newborn sister. My family was becoming hers. Even my uncles didn't ask me anything about the gift. She stole everything I’d ever had，my life and my presents. Thinking about this，I cried to sleep. I had a nightmare（噩梦）and woke up at the middle of the night. Shadows were all around me, and I was defenseless and so weak.1 ran into my parents’ bedroom but couldn't wake up my poor parents who were just too worn out. I was standing near their bed, trying not to cry when I saw her. She was awake and looking at me with her big eyes in her small bed. 故事山 story mountain The beginning Development Climax 高潮 Resolution 解决 The ending Writing the framework 第 02 章 两个段首例句确定第一段 关键词：cry--comfort 句式：after doing sth I comforted my young sister 动作描写为主 关键词：something，inside 标题 伏笔：but it just happened in an instant Sister was the best gift I had received 段首句及主题标题，伏笔确定第二段 Para.2:After having comforted her, something slowly changed inside me. 续写框架： Para.1:Suddenly, she started crying. 动作，心理描写为主 妹妹的反应：头，脸，四肢，五官… 我安慰：轻抚，轻拍，抱着轻轻 摇晃，握着，哼歌，转移注意力… 温柔地，轻缓地，有耐心地，有节奏地… 妹妹平静下来，我也长舒一口气 1 2 3 4 5 续写框架：十句五定 Para.1:Suddenly, she started cryin ... ...
