Unit1 My Dream Job话题作文仁爱科普版（2024）八年级英语上册

新仁爱版八年级上Unit1话题作文“My Dream Job” 一、书面表达题目：假设你是李华，请根据下面表格的提示信息，以 “My Dream Job” 为题，写一篇英语短文，与同学分享你梦想的职业。词数 80 个左右。 My Dream Job What you are like helpful What you want to be a doctor What you will do 1. at school 2. at work 分析：what：我的梦想中的工作，尽量入题，也可以用定语从句 范文： I am a helpful person who is always ready to assist others when they are in need. My dream job is to be a doctor. Doctors play a crucial role in people's lives because they can cure diseases and save lives. To make my dream come true, I will study hard at school. I will focus on subjects like biology and chemistry, as they are very important for a future doctor. When I become a doctor, I will try my best to help every patient. I believe that as long as I keep working hard and never give up, my dream will surely come true. And I'm confident that being a doctor will not only let me help others but also make my life meaningful.（125个词） 二、1.学生一作文： I'm li Hua. I feel like being a doctor in the future. I'm helpful and always try my best to help others.So I want to be a doctor to help more people get rid of illness. There are some things I will do.At school，I am going to make a plan about how can I become a doctor and follow it. I will make every effort to study biology hard as well.It's saying goes “no pain no gain”.I also will keep going after all I meets many challenges at work. I am sure that my dream will come true. (100个词） 修改后的满分作文 As a student who always cares about others’ health, I have a clear dream.That is to become a doctor in the future. I made this decision last year, when I saw a doctor patiently(耐心地） comfort a sick child and help him recover（康复）. That moment brought me an idea that doctors do not just treat(治愈） illnesses—they bring hope to families. To achieve（获得） this goal（目标）, I first make a clear study plan that focuses on biology and chemistry, as these subjects lay a solid foundation(基础） for medical studies. I also volunteer（当志愿者） at a community clinic （社区诊所）on weekends to learn basic care skills. Challenges like heavy study tasks may come, but I will never give up. I believe my dream will come true one day, and I can make a difference in people’s life.（167） 2.学生二习作： 优点：有一定的内容逻辑，能阐述梦想职业的转变及为梦想付出的努力。 不足：语法错误较多（如 “my mother told me doctor can help sick people” 表述错误，“about help sick people” 介词后动词形式错误等）；词汇较简单，缺乏高级词汇；逻辑连贯性欠佳，部分句子衔接不自然；内容细节不够丰富，对想成为医生的原因和为梦想努力的描述比较笼统。 修改后的满分作文My Dream Job A few years ago, I hoped(aspired期待） to be a taikonaut as I dreamed of traveling in space one day. But now, my dream job is to be a doctor, which was inspired（激励） by my mother. When I was five, my mother told me that doctors, who are like angels in white, can help sick people get rid of pain an ... ...