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易错点1 审题不细，偏离主题 1.（2018·新课标卷I）假定你是李华，你的新西兰朋友Terry将去中国朋友家做客，发邮件向你询问有关习俗。请你回复邮件，内容包括： 1．到达时间； 2．合适的礼物； 3．餐桌礼仪。 注意： 1．词数100左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 【错因分析】本文虽然看起来比较容易，但学生真正动起笔来，还是比较困惑的。原因为：1.看起来中国餐桌礼仪很熟悉，但内容很多，一时间不知道该写什么；2.100单词左右，写出到达时间；合适的礼物；餐桌礼仪三个内容，信息量大，选择有困难。 【参考范文】 Dear Terry, How are you doing? Learning that you are about to pay a visit to a Chinese friend and confused about the Chinese customs, I am writing to put forward some advice. Firstly, I would like to suggest that you arrive 5 to 10 minutes earlier, which is common in Chinese traditional culture. Secondly, if I were you, I would bring some appropriate gifts with me, such as souvenirs from my own country. Besides, table manners are also what you should pay attention to. For example, you are not supposed to stick your chopsticks into your food. Instead, laying them on your dish is a smart choice. If you have any other problems, please don’t hesitate to contact me. Yours Li Hua 2. 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍在＂传统文化进校园＂活动中，向面人艺术家学习捏面人的过程，并以＂A Day with a Craftsman＂为题，给校刊＂英语角＂写一篇英文稿件。 注意： 词数不少于 60。 提示词： 一个面团 a piece of dough 面人 dough figurine （请务必将作文写在答题卡指定区域内） _____ 【错因分析】对于看图作文，考生会由于审题不清，往往纠缠于某幅图中的某个细节而偏离文章的主题。 本题考查的细节是手工艺人教大家如何去做这个东西，学生认真聆听，是教与学。第二幅图最重要的点就是学生能不能找到学生认真聆听这个环节，因为老师教一定能看得出来，但是学生能不能写到学生在听，这应该是一个得分点。第三幅图是一个指导。所以，重点在于一对一这样对应的指导关系。最后一幅图是我们在上课的时候会重点讲照相，大家很欢乐，做成一个作品。 所以，除了四幅图的要点之外，重点在于一对一这样对应的指导关系。所以写好这样的作文一定要抓住细节，才能得分。还需要注意时态，词汇不要拼写错误，多用复合句式才能体现出亮点。考生切忌在文章开篇犯低级的语法错误，尤其注意时态、单复数及冠词的正确使用。相比于实用性强的应用文来说，情景作文可以在保证要点齐全的前提下适当增加长难句的使用，如对非谓语、三大从句及连词进行灵活运用。关注句式的多样性及用词的准确性对取得该板块的高分会有更大的保障。本文可分三段来写： 第一段简单介绍故事发生的背景信息； 第二段描述图画的内容； 第三段对全文进行总结。 【参考范文】 Last Tuesday, our class invited an old craftsman to teach us how to make dough figurines. When the craftsman came into the classroom, we gave him a warm welcome and two boys helped him with the tool box. First, he showed us the basic steps and skills of making dough figurines. We stood around him and watched attentively. Then we started to have a try ourselves. The old man walked around and helped us patiently. Finally, we put the figurines we made on the table and took pictures with the old craftsman. Looking at the figurines, we were ... ...