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课件网) Everyday Heroes Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 A story how where when why who what Who Where When What Why How TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (Who) Kim TJ Smith the bearded man a suspect neighbors rescue Brad Ware & his wife kidnap Who Where When What Why How TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man On a street in Wichita Falls, Texas. Last December, on a crisp Saturday afternoon The bearded man kidnapped Kim; TJ Smith tried to rescue her. Possibly with the help of Brad Ware If he lost her, TJ feared, she might never be found alive. Interpretation of underlined words Time and places Plot development feelings street alley catch her breath walked away kicking and biting get free of Brad Ware dashed panicked first thought Interpretation of given information 续写首句解读 (G-N策略） Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Given Information Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. New Information ① on the street or near/in that house ② Kim was saved. (possibly by TJ and Ware) ① What was the house like ② What did TJ see and do ③ How was Kim saved ① What happened to Kim and the bearded man in the end ② Who are everyday heroes ③ Why are they considered heroes panicked Brad Ware dashed first thought street kicking and biting Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Its windows were busted, doors boarded up, and yard over-grown. He was shoving the panicked girl through a window. Just then, Ware and his wife pulled up. “Stay here,” Ware told TJ as he took off toward the house. Ware and the man fought with each other, and finally Ware managed to take him down. Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. Kim dashed into the safety of her mother’s arms. Meanwhile, officers cuffed and arrested Raeshawn Perez, 26. there were a few heroes that day, but Ware insisted that the quick-thinking, dogged 11-year-old deserved most of the credit. 对上述问题进行回答，我们就可以写出这样两段结尾： 点评：从故事情节上看，两个续写段落已经完整地交代了这个事件的结局。但是，从内容和语言角度看，续写第一段中how was Kim saved应该是该故事最紧张，最扣人心弦的高潮部分，对这个部分进行细致的描述，不仅容易吸引读者也有利于烘托everyday heroes这个主题，传递正能量。而本段仅仅用fight with去描述打斗过程，显得有些干瘪，让满心期待的读者颇感失望。续写第二段虽然清楚交代了受害者和犯罪嫌疑人的结局，以及对everyday heroes这个主题进行了呼应，但是如果能再增加一些细节描写和人们对于该事件的评论的话会更符合本文的报道文学的特点，增加其可信度和可读性。 The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能之动作表达：打斗篇 我们常说，行动从思想中来。动作描写是刻画人物的重要方法之一 ... ...
